my naruto story

YAAY!^^

sorry its taking so long to get chapter seven up but haven't been able to talk to nayoto and get better ideas but it will be up by tomorow night.

You don't have to be in a hurry all the people on listal who love to read your storys will wait!^^

i know but my school starts sooon and i gotta get out of the chunnin exams before it starts cause if i dont i will never get it done.

well then everyone will keep cheering you on!^^

thanks

Ur welcome O_O oh no it's storming!_!

WoW koji you must work fast if you can type those by the end of a day or tomarrow!^^

Great story really cool i know ino writes a lot!^^

yeah sakura u told me that she loves writting naruto storys and lo-

like i was saying and loves to read other peoples storys.

yeah i do like to!^^

hey chapter seven up by end of the day just ask nayoto

ok!^^-_- i'm only on chapter 2 with my story!^^

me either

thanks and i can help and im sure nayoto would help you guys also

ok i'll be sure to ask if i need help with my story!^^

good and i hope you liked that koji finally told kitsura how he felt

FFS called me a boy again:(

FFS better not say that koji's storys are bad cuz i no they aren't they are cool!^^

sure blonde hinata you can use any of my characters so long as you use koji

hey guys finally finished it and now im ready to post it and just so you know this one im completely crediting to nayoto

Chapter seven: scared strait the forest of death

“Okay unfortunately I’m the proctor for the second examination.” Said a man with black hair tied back and a grey unbuttoned jacket on. Underneath the jacket was a fishnet shirt. He wore grey shorts. “For those of you who don’t know who I am my name is Shickamaru Nara.” Shickamaru said. “Now then the rules are simple. This place is called the forest of death. Basically in this exam you are supposed to get a hold of a heaven and an earth scroll. Each team will start out with one or the other. Now then if one member of your team becomes incapacitated you fail. If you read the scrolls before you get to the tower with both of them then you will fail. And if you don’t make it to the tower in three days with both scrolls you fail. Now then go get your consent forms and turn them in at that table which is also where you will get your heaven or earth scroll. Then go to one of the gates and wait for it to be unlocked.” Shickamaru said. Koji and his squad quickly got and signed their consent forms. Then they were handed a scroll with a brown lining and a white inner part. “Hmm they gave us a heaven scroll.” Nayoto said after they got to one of the gates. Soon Shickamaru showed up to unlock their gate. “And now everybody can begin.” Shickamaru said. Koji and his group walked into the forest. “I wonder how Kinhag and his squad are doing.” Koji said out loud……… “Okay no one can see us take off the disguises.” Kinhag said. “Thank you finally.” Linagy said. Suddenly they were surrounded by smoke. Then it disappeared. Now standing in Kinhags place was Kabuto. In Linagys place was Itachi Uchiha. And in Hasdys place was Kisuame. “Perfect now then as long as the other akatsuki members infiltrated the exams were good.” Kabuto said. “What about the sound ninja did they get in?” Itachi asked. “Yes Naruto decided to heal things between the two countries. Plus this is the first time ninja from every country have been at the chunin exams at the exact same time.” Kabuto said. “Well we better get ourselves an earth scroll and it looks like Koji and his group have one let’s attack them but not in disguise.” Kisuame said. “No we need to attack another group and keep Koji’s group as our friends for now.” Kabuto said. “Fine what about that one group with that smart-mouth named Hiroka?” Itachi asked. “Yes and we wont wear our disguises they wont know who we are.” Kabuto said they soon left out to attack Sakura’s squad………. “Okay its going to be dark soon so let’s make camp here.” Hiroka said. “Fine and hey I know a squad with a heaven scroll.” Hiru said. “Who?” Kitsura asked. “Koji’s squad. They got a heaven scroll.” Hiru said. “Okay let’s get them tomorrow.” Hiroka said. Then it was decided that they would attack Koji’s squad tomorrow. That was when they suddenly heard noise in the bushes. “Here Hiru you’re the fastest take the scroll and rune away.” Hiroka said. “okay.” Hiru said. He then took off and didn’t stop for at least ten minutes but by then the battle had started. “Who are you? I mean one has a strange leaf headband the other has a mist headband and the third has a sound headband.” Hiroka asked. “I’m Kabuto and these two are Itachi and Kisuame.” Kabuto said. “Wait Kabuto you were banned from the leaf village years ago. And Itachi is a rouge ninja. He was the brother of Sasuke.” Kitsura said. “Yeah and?” Hiroka asked. “I was the youngest leader of the anbu black ops and the youngest person to become a chunin. Plus I’m the guy that killed off all the Uchihas.” Itachi said. Then he yelled out, “sharingan!” soon the battle was being waged……… “Hey did you here that?” Nayoto asked. “No what?” Koji said. “That voice it yelled out sharingan but I’m the only Uchiha in the forest.” Nayoto said. “Well let’s go check it out.” Koji said. Soon they arrived at the fight between Kabuto’s team and Sakura’s squad. “Hmm. More runts. Kisuame go after the runt with the earth scroll.” Kabuto ordered. “Itachi deal with the Uchiha boy the mist freak and the Hyugga kid.” Kabuto said. “Sharingan!” Nayoto yelled. “You can’t even use its full power yet so don’t try.” Itachi yelled. “But I have something else! Byokugon!” Haru yelled. “Hey ill go help Hiru.” Koji said. “Good cause you’re the fastest anyway.” Nayoto said. Koji took off after Kisuame and Hiru. Meanwhile Nayoto and Haru fought off Itachi. “You still don’t know who I am or what I did do you?” Itachi asked Nayoto. “You are Itachi Uchiha that much I know whether or not you really killed off most of the Uchiha clan is to be seen.” Nayoto said. “Hm. Phoenix fire ball jutsu!” Itachi yelled. Okay Sasuke warned me that if I ever faced Itachi not to look at any part of his body. I’ll use my new jutsu. Nayoto thought. “Rat boar tiger boar dragon rat! Sixth sense no jutsu.” Nayoto said. Immediately all other sense took on lesser roles and his hearing became important. Now every move and sound wave told Nayoto exactly where anybody was. “So you have a way around my genjutsu I guess we have to do this the old fashion way taijutsu.” Itachi said. Nayoto ran at Itachi and hit him in the arm with blind fury. “Hmp. So you do believe that I killed the Uchihas.” Itachi said. “Would you shut up and fight!” Nayoto yelled eyes still closed. Then Nayoto threw a punch towards Itachi’s jaw. Itachi caught the punch and then twisted Nayoto’s arm. Then Nayoto drew a kunai and threw it at Itachi who caught it and went to throw it back when Nayoto yelled, “Razengan!” what he shouldn’t be able to do that yet! Itachi thought. Nayoto ran at Itachi and thrusted the Razengan into Itachi's stomach. Itachi hit the ground knocked out. Great he’ll be out for the rest of the test. Same thing happened to me after Naruto did that. Kabuto thought. “Hm. You kids are good too bad Itachi got knocked out other wise you’d all be dead.” Kabuto said. Then he picked up Itachi's unconscious body and ran after Kisuame. “Well that battle was won. And if you want we can all travel together.” Nayoto said. “Thank you but no.” Hiroka said when Kitsura butted in, “we will accept your hospitality and protection.” “Okay we’ll go get our gear.” Nayoto said. I wonder how Koji is doing. Nayoto thought……… finally Koji caught up with Kisuame and Hiru. “Hand over the scroll boy.” Kisuame said. “Never you are gonna have to pry from my cold dead hands.” Hiru said knowing that Koji was in the tree above Kisuame’s head. “Fine then.” Kisuame said while starting to draw his shark fin blade sword. That was when Koji dropped down and yelled, “Water clone jutsu!” “To easy.” Kisuame said. Then he cut through the clones. “Thank you Kisuame.” Koji said. “Secret jutsu crystal ice mirrors!” Koji yelled. What!?!? Kisuame thought. Suddenly Koji had surrounded Kisuame. “Now then to kill the mist village traitor.” Koji said while stepping into the mirrors. Then Koji quickly moved from mirror to mirror throwing senbons at Kisuame. When he thought Kisuame was dead he released the jutsu. That was when Kabuto sneaked in and recovered Kisuame’s unconscious body. Why did Lord Oruchi Maru say that the akatsuki could help me when he died? They’ve only been dead weight and were out of the chunin exams. Perfect. Kabuto thought. “Well let’s get back to your camp.” Koji said. “Okay but who in your group has the scroll?” Hiru asked. “Who do you think the fastest one?” Koji answered. “Oh Nayoto.” Hiru said. “No me you idiot! Sheesh.” Koji yelled. They soon got back to the new camp for both squads. The next day the headed out to search for other groups to so they could collect the scrolls. Finally both teams got the needed scrolls and headed to the tower. Once there they unrolled the scrolls and watched what happened………

wow koji u must type fat i can't think or type fast thats why i still am working!^^'

well it took me a while to be able to type that fast

i have 3 bottles of water in frot of me. #1sugar water. #2salt water and #3just pain water.

hey on some jutsu im going to say the hand signs in japanese cause i just wrote down what they all are when translated so i want to type a few like that okay?

Um ok:(Koji i need help on my story...

okay just tell me what you neeed help on specifically

One thing that's helped me is to use certain words for certain tones. This doesn't mean big words at all. I've often sacrificed a big word for one that just fit in with the piece of writing. As a writer, you decide which words to use to fit your tone. It's a complicated matter, but if you're familiar with the English language you should be able to have a sense of what goes where. Am I making sense? If not, I'll explain further.

i'm sorry i haven't finished my story it's that i can't sorry

whats a good japanese girl name?

listen if you dont like naruto stay off my short story threads cause you guys are pisssing me off

Yeah you tell em koji!^^

You go man....TELL THERE ASS'S OFF!!! There nothing but scared little bicths....not insulting dogs ofcourse.

heh....*why do i feel like this is going to go really bad^^'*

How many cuts should I repeat?
How many fates should I accept?
Does it have an end?

listen if you dont like naruto stay off my short story threads cause you guys are pisssing me off

I thought my criticism was helpful (though vague) on both this thread and on Ino's. If you look at both posts, you'll see no malicious tone of any sort. So why are people responding like they are?

The fact is, saying what you like about a story is good. It lets the author know what they're doing right. But criticism is much more helpful. You said in your profile that you want to be published. Well, some of the greatest novels of all time have been rejected for various reasons. Do you know what the authors did? They revised them, according to what the initial feedback was. It all really pays off.

Whether criticism is given in a kind spirit or a vicious one, a true author should always take it to heart.

i tryed bleeding a thousand oceans but it stoped.sorry.And i think that koji is a good writer and will someday make lots of books and i'm not liying i'm telling the truth!

Don't slit your wrists, Ino. That's not the way to go about it.

All writers, even 'good' ones, need criticism every now and then. It's good that you think that he's going to take the world by storm. You have your own opinion, which is nice. But your opinion doesn't mean that there aren't flaws in his writing. It looks like he has his material straight, but there's just a certain blandness to his writing. I gave the best advice I could use: Select more lively words to fit the occasion.

The fact that none of you are willing to take criticism makes me feel like you think that giving criticism is 'mean'. But it's not. Even if the one giving it is trying to be mean, they're actually helping you. The fact is, writers have to have thick hides.

Now I don't wish to be rude in saying this, but you've all given a rather poor show in taking criticism. Admitting your wrongs is still an option, of course. It doesn't show weakness on your part. It shows growth, actually.

I won't give further criticism, but I'll respond to other things if I feel it necessary.