writing

i don't know about any of you guys, but i love to write and use my imagination. in fact, im writing a book. what do you guys write. can you show me?

I can't show you any of mine, as I am attempting to get most of them published before I'm eighteen, if you search 'fan fic' here, you can find the old one I posted back before anime was closed down(it's still there, but no one can post :P in it) I never finished it, in fact looking back on it it was child's play compared to what I do now...

I've had what I like to call a renaissance... or maybe an artistic awakening, where I have suddenly gotten extremely better at drawing and writing in a week then I have all my life(and I've been having this artistic awakening for about 3 weeks now :P it's awesome)

well, ive drawn for my whole life so i know im good at that, when it comes to writing, idk, mabe ill write a quick poem.

no arguments, no one says im gay, or i swear ill get this and a few other treads deleted.

Here I sit
Just day by day
Never ever moving
Always here to stay
A feeling of compression
A tought that i'm not safe

I just feel insecurity
In my sitting place
Stopped and helped by no one
Completely out of sight
Always here to stay
On my sitting nights

Blindness in braod day light
Even when i'm not blind
The grip on me tightens
For one eternal bind
So here I'll sit
Until the grip gives way
Sitting on my sitting spot
Day and day by day

its an origianl, patented and award winning.

Thats awesome, I have a book of poems that I've made, but they are all very weak, simple and amateurish, my forte is more the long story type(everything I'm writing as of now(other then fan fics) has a 10+ page prologue, and there's at least 30 chapters twice that size :P, if you bring a 10 page prologue down tothe size of a book it is about 20-30 pages or so :P)

(By your terms I'm a nerd, But I don't mind, as long as I can still play sports, beat the snot out of a LOT of people(within my age range) in swordplay and staff use, draw, write, etc. etc. I don't care :P, I know people from every social group, and I stay my own social group, so bleh :P)

(I'm not Willis :P I'm Leif Ericson! Hinger dinger danger!!! *Throws battle axe randomly* Tally ho! Wait... wrong phrase :D)

Oh, but I can tell you what is the basic genre of some...

Various genres:
Suspense, Mysteries, Werewolves, Angels, Demons, Wolves, Vampires, High School Life, Romance, Fantasy(sorta), a few(VERY FEW) sci fi, Zombies, dragons, legendary beasts...

there's more... but those are the more basic genres...

I love too write it is cool i have like a little book to write in

i mostly write anime stuff

some one write some thing about something! i want to compare and contrast! plz?

I would, but I don't know where the starting ofmy Warriors Fan Fic Prologue is,...

Here's mine, this was from a few months ago, and it hasn't been updated(Ash and I went through and modified some characters and stuff, so I'll have to find that list...) But here it is,

btw Ash, if you still wanna work on this I finally found MOST of it :P
Sorry, this isn't even the full prologue, but here it is, a year old, but it still reflects a bit of my newfound skill in writing, though not much
Prologue: Moonkit Appears!!
Oceanmist, beautiful blue-grey she-cat with dazzling big blue eyes, had been patrolling the River Clan border for almost an hour now, and had not caught scent of any cat except a few Thunder Clan cats from yesterday. I’m going to check the river one more up and down, just to be on the safe side! she thought to herself, as she began dashing over to the river, the special geography of the River Clan, and began to walk slowly up it, as she neared the Two-Leg bridge, she heard a terrified mewing sound, and began to scent the air, an smelled something like a cat, but not of any clan here, so she quickly dashed to the bridge to see what it was and saw it, a small little white kit with grey, tiger-like markings, looking at her with terror in his bright green eyes, why is it so afraid? She thought, then the realization struck her like a cat clawing into her side Oh-no! I must be hare-brained! He’s about to fall off the bridge! She began to dash over to the bridge in a much more urgent manner, and narrowly jumped the length to where the kit was about to fall. grabbed the kit and landed on the other side, in Thunder Clan territory. She began to hear yowls of anger as a large, ginger tom-cat with angry green eyes stared at her angrily, Oceanmist noticed how large his paws were and winced at the thought of fighting such a cat. “What are you doing here River Clan cat!?” the cat yowled angrily.
“I am very sorry! Please hear me out, first may I ask your name? I am Oceanmist, and you know I am a River Clan cat, now please hear my reason” She meowed desperately, eyes shown with worry and guilt.
The large cat seemed to soften up as he realized how terrifying he must have been. “I am Bigclaw, of Thunder Clan, now tell me this reason you think gives you the right to be on our border!” He hissed, though not as loud or mean as before.
“I-I-I saw this kit on the bridge… about to fall in and… without thinking jumped over here to catch it… I’m deeply sorry, please forgive me, I had no intentions of stealing prey or anything! please believe me…” She meowed ashamedly, while gesturing towards the kit in between her now clattering teeth, her tail low to the ground, extremely embarrassed.
Bigclaw seemed to lighten up even more, though still maintained the hostile tone. “well… alright but if I see you again on our borders I wont listen to your explanation, you will definitely have a fight on your hands!” He meowed silently as he heard meows coming from somewhere behind him. “well! Get out of here or else you will be crow food you hare-brain!” he yowled angrily as he trotted off towards the meows.
Oceanmist bowed her head in respect “thank you for being so understanding” she meowed quickly as she jumped back across, and then she stopped and stared back, listening to the voices.
“Well, we smelled River Clan Bigclaw! Was there anyone over there?!” A cat yowled.
“No there was nothing over there…” Bigclaws voice sounded. The voices of the other cats then quieted down as they trotted back to their camp. Oceanmist sighed in relief, he sure is a very nice cat, I’m glad I met him and not one of the other cats with him! she thought as she quickly ran dashed back to camp. As she ran to camp she noticed a nest of rats and quickly caught the mother and father and then killed each of the babies, she felt bad for killing them, but they were food and it was leaf bare, they couldn’t afford to let any prey escape. She picked them up and then saw the
little kit struggle in her mouth, so she dropped him, he walked over to one of the children, grabbed
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It in his teeth and began dragging it, Oceanmist smiled, Even though he is a kit, and he doesn’t even belong in this clan… he still wants to help and yet he can’t even speak yet… this kit… it would make such a great warrior The young warrior picked up the other prey and began to walk slowly with the kit as she led him to the River Clan camp. When Oceanmist finally got back to camp she was chilled and so was the poor little kit, she quickly took the prey from it and put it in the fresh kill pile, then hesitated, and grabbed 3 pieces of prey, motioned for the kit to follow, which it did and headed towards her leader’s den but was interrupted by her friend Rainpelt, a blue-grey she-cat with blue eyes, “Hi Oceanmist! How was patrol?!” Rainpelt said happily, they had both become warriors during the same moon and were the same age, they were extremely close friends.
“Well… I ran into a bit of trouble when I accidentally went on Thunder Clan territory, luckily, a nice cat name Bigclaw was there, and let it go because I gave him a good reason” She meowed impatiently, gesturing to the small shivering kit beside her.
“Aww! Poor thing! I think you should go talk to Muddystar quickly, she will know what to do! Bye Oceanmist!” Rainpelt said dashing off. Muddystar was a blue-gray she-cat with brown splotches on her and pale blue eyes.
“Bye… now lets get going to the leader’s den!” She meowed nicely to the small kit, whom purred loudly, Oceanmist picked up her food and the other piece as the kit picked up the prey she had given to it and they scuttled towards the den and walked in.
“Ah! Oceanmist! How are you?” Muddystar mewed happily.
“Well… I saw this kit on a bridge and it was about to fall in, and so I saved it, and I got caught by a Thunder Clan cat, but he let me go because of this kit and well…” Oceanmist was stopped as the kit quietly picked up the prey Oceanmist had brought for Muddystar and placed it in front of the leader and then ran behind Oceanmist.
“Hmmm I’m guessing you wanted to know if it could join River Clan?” Muddystar meowed in an amused voice.
“Yes! I realize this doesn’t seem like a very good idea to let an outsider in but… it’s just a kit and it helped carry the prey back here with me! So I think it could become a very loyal warrior!” She quickly meowed, her head down scared that her leader might say no.
“Alright… but! On one condition, since you found him, you need to do the work to help him, I want you first to find a queen to help raise him, and if you help care for the kit, and later, mentor it then I will let him stay” Muddystar said as she walked out of the room.
“Thank you Muddystar!” Oceanmist meowed gratefully as she turned tail with the kit and walked out the door, heading for the queen’s dens. After she got out she put the kit down, “Now, are you a boy or a girl?” She inquired, checking the kit. “Okay you’re a boy, now lets find you a mother shall we?” She said picking him up and dashing into the queen’s den.
She noticed the closest queen and walked over to her, her name was Twinfang, a tabby with orangey eyes and 2 kits, Puffkit and Wildkit, Wildkit was a brown and white tom with yellow eyes, while puffkit was a black and white tom with green eyes. “Good morning, Twinfang, How are your kits?” Oceanmist said with a bow of respect.
“They’re doing fine thank you!” She hissed angrily. She glanced at the kit by Oceanmist, “What is that? Such a scrawny kit! Get it away from my kits! It might have a disease or flees!” She hissed even more angrily.
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Oceanmist’s eyes fell “Alright… I’ll ask someone else then” She walked over to the next queen, a yellow she-cat green eyes named Poppyseed, whom immediately told her no just with a look of her eyes, she was a small cat and only had one kit, Ligerkit, a dark tabby tom-cat with pale blue eyes. Oceanmist felt even worse after Waterwing, a very nice blue-grey she-cat with blue eyes refused, because her two kits, Cloudkit, a grey and white she-cat with blue eyes, and Bluekit, a blue-gray she-cat with yellow eyes, were rather weak and she needed to care for them. Oceanmist felt like the kit might not be able to stay here, when she padded over to Fluffpelt, a ginger cat with blue eyes, Fluffpelt had 5 kits already, Cheetahpaw, a yellow she-cat with brown splotches and brown eyes, Lilykit, a brown she-cat with brown eyes, Wolfkit, a silver tom-cat with yellow eyes, Skykit, a blue-grey she-cat with blue eyes, Sunkit a ginger tan tabby with yellow eyes. “Um… Fluffpelt, may I speak with you please?” Oceanmist mewed quietly.
“Of course Oceanmist! Why! What a cute kit! Is he yours?” She inquired happily, staring at the cute little kit who was batting at a fly.
“No! He’s not my kit!!!” Oceanmist mewed loudly, embarrassed but then quickly calmed down. “I was wondering if you could please raise him with your kits, I found him outside our border and… well he’ll die if we leave him!” She pleaded. Lionclaw padded over furiously with Cheetahpaw just behind him. Cheetahpaw looked at the kit and then looked angry.
“I don’t think that we should take in another kit mom! Especially a kit like that!” She hissed angrily, tail flicking two and froe.
“I refuse to have such a small kit be brought into our family” Lionclaw growled angrily, tail flicking even more then Cheetahpaw’s.
All of a sudden, Sunkit and Lilykit stood up from their mother and examined kit. Then they both chorused “We think he should stay! Look at him he’s so cold!” They mewed running over to him.
Oceanmist looked down at the three of them. “He can’t speak yet either, and your kits seem to like him, please! Take him in…” Oceanstar pleaded once more, after more silence she stared at Fluffpelt, then looked down and picked up the kit. “Alright… I understand… You don’t want the kit… I’ll bring him to Thunder Clan border and leave him there…” She meowed lowly, and turned to pad away.
“Wait! Who said I didn’t want him?” Fluffpelt asked.
“You mean you will?! Thank you Fluffpelt!!!” Oceanstar Meowed loudly, bowing her head. “I promise I’ll help take care of him!”
“What!? But you can’t seriously mean that Fluffpelt!!!” Lionclaw and Cheetahpaw uproared angrily. “Alright…” They both sighed angrily.
“Yay!” The four other kits chimed in. Oceanstar dashed off happily to tell Muddystar the good news. She dashed over to her leader’s den quickly, I’m so lucky Fluffpelt decided to let the kit stay with her! Now he can stay here and live a life! She padded into the den to see Muddystar, sitting on the floor impatiently.
“Well?” Muddystar inquired, tail flicking impatiently.
“Fluffpelt has agreed to take care of him! And I promise I will help every way I can, including hunting for them and helping Lionclaw with his apprentice, if he will let me!” Oceanstar meowed joyfully.
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“Then he can stay, I’ll name him tonight since he’s not really Fluffpelt’s tell her please…” Muddystar dismisses Oceanmist whom runs hapilly back to the queen’s den to infrom Fluffpelt.
“Fluffpelt!” Oceanmist mewed excitedly, running over to her.
“Yes dear?” Fluffpelt stretch luxuriously, and lazily sat back down.
“Muddystar say she wishes to name the kit tonight at a ceremony, please bring the kit there, until then bye Fluffpelt!” Oceanmist recited quickly. “And also, I promise I’m going to help you anyway I can, I’ll go get you some prey, alright Fluffpelt?” She mewed quickly and ran off to see Rainpelt.
“Hello Oceanmist! How did it work with the kit?” Rainpelt meowed while quickly finishing her dinner.
“He is staying with Fluffpelt! And he is getting a kit name tonight! I promised Fluffpelt that I would help her, so I’m going to go catch some prey for her… Want to come?” Oceanmist happily meowed, and, without waiting, began padding towards the exit of the camp.
“Alright! I’ll come! Wait up!” Rainpelt hollered happily, running into the woods after Oceanmist.
Oceanmist and Rainpelt were walking through the woods, headed towards the river when they caught a smell… Shadow Clan cats! Without thinking, Oceanstar jumped towards where the smell came from and yowled “Who’s there!?” and landed into the thicket, the thicket shook as Oceanstar rolled out with a cat under her, she had it pinned.
“Please don’t hurt me! My name is Crowpaw! I came with my mentor to ask something from your leader! Honest!” Crowpaw said, a black small cat from Shadow Clan. Just as he finished, a large black cat came out of another bush.
“I’m Ravenfeather, of Shadow Clan, and he is correct, we are here in peace, we wish to ask Muddystar something… please listen to us, we promise no harm, we need help ourselves actually…” Ravenfeather said bowing in respect. Crowpaw now doing the same.
“Alright… we’ll lead you guys to our camp… but if u try anything funny, you will both have slit throats before you even know it!” Rainpelt growled, eyeing them both suspiciously and then she turned tail and walked off.
“Come on you two!” Oceanmist motioned towards Rainpelt and ran after her. Ravenfeather and Crowpaw shrugged and followed the two she-cats. When they arrived at the camp all eyes were on the Shadow Clan cats as Oceanmist and Rainpelt lead them to their leader’s den. When they walked in Muddystar turned around delighted, until she saw the Shadow Clan cats.
“What are they doing here?!” Muddystar said, her eyes a little shifty and her tail flicking nervously at the thought of two Shadow Clan cats so close to her.
Crowpaw and Ravenfeather bowed their heads respectfully, easing Muddystar. “We have come to ask for help, our deputy, Brokenwings, well… we saw him talking to a few rogue cats, they referred to their leader as Devil, and well… he seems to be planning to kill Duskstar, our leader and well… we fear he may kill us both, because he noticed us and Devil chased after us, we have managed to tell you so please keep an eye on Brokenwings, we know he has ambitious plots but our leader didn’t believe us so if Brokenwings does anything funny, please help our clan! Please…” Ravenfeather pleaded. Oceanmist couldn’t help but feel sorry for the Shadow Clan cats, so far Duskstar had been the only good Shadow Clan leader out of the previous ones and she felt if he

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was out of the picture, there’d be war from now on. Oceanmist was about to reply before she was interrupted by Muddystar.
“If Brokenwings is meant to lead then Duskstar will die with or without help, if he is not
meant to lead, then Duskwing will not die, or both will die… that is all I have to say to you two, but, since it is becoming dark, I will allow you two to stay here for the night, I will explain to Duskstar at the next gathering a reason why I took you two in, but! If you show any signs of an attack, I won’t hesitate to have you both killed!” Muddystar growled on the last part.
“Thank you Muddystar” Ravenfeather bowed his head further down. “Thank you very much!” He got up and was led out by Riverstone, the current deputy, who was a black tom with grey tabby marks and green eyes.
“Do you think that is true Muddystar? Could Brokenwings really be planning such a thing?” Oceanmist meowed, thinking of how nice Brokenwings was at the last Gathering.
“I don’t know Oceanmist… we will find out eventually if they throw this plan into action…” Muddystar meowed silently, seemingly worried because right now Shadow Clan and River Clan were having a much better relationship then they have had in the past. “I’ve known Duskstar for quite a few moons now… and I really don’t think he will die, honestly, I don’t think he will ever die from another cat… he was always so strong…” Memories seemed to be washing over Muddystar as she said this. “Alright… could you two please leave me now, Oceanmist and Rainpelt?” She got up and padded into the back room of her den and lied down.
“Yes Muddystar! Right away!” Oceanmist meowed quickly, leaving with Rainpelt. As they ran outside Rainpelt looked distant as she walked over to her apprentice, Greenpaw, a greenish brown cat with green eyes. Just then, a blue-grey she-cat with green eyes came padding up to Oceanmist just as she was going to ask Rainpelt what was wrong, it was Mistpaw.
“What? Mouse got your tongue Oceanmist? You said we would train today!” Mistpaw said Pouting.
Darn she is right… I’ll have to talk to Rainpelt later… I guess training would ease my mind… She thought. “Alright, lets go train for a while! I’ll teach you a few useful fighting moves when your pinned down! But… we will have to quit early because we have the ceremony tonight for a new kit, and also I want to speak with the two Shadow Clan cats… alright?” She meowed cheerfully, and without waiting for an answer, ran off to the training hollows.
“Alright fine… but it better be some cool moves!” Mistpaw said playfully, batting the air and hopping around happily.
She is so playful and energetic… she can be such a great warrior though she is so immature at times, I still feel our apprentices and that kit have what it takes to change the forest forever… “Hey… Mistpaw… what do you think about that kit? The kit I brought here?” Oceanmist inquired.
“Who? I’ve never met any of the kits before…” Mistpaw said quietly. Her tail low and unhappy.
“Tell you what! I’ll bring you to the queen’s den tonight after the ceremony alright? So that you can meet him and the other kits!” Oceanmist meowed happily as they entered the training hollows.
“Well… alright! That sounds like fun!!!” Mistpaw said bouncily running over to a large open space where no one was training and waited for Oceanmist. “Come on! Come on! Come on! I want
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to learn new fighting moves!!!” Mistpaw chanted.
“Alright, get on top of me like your pinning me” Oceanmist said as she laid down on the ground and waited for Mistpaw to get on top of her. “This one is to use your hind legs” She said.
Without warning Oceanmist pushed with her hind legs into Mistpaw’s gut and threw her off. “You want to push with your hind legs into their lower stomach and this will knock them off of you” She meowed while pinning Mistpaw. “Now you try!”
For a few minutes Mistpaw failed a couple of times and then finally, got it right. “I did it! I did it! Did it did it did it!” She chanted happily and proudly, for knocking down an older cat.
“Alright! Alright! You can stop now, lets teach you a more effective, harder one, and if you can use this I’ll teach you the final one… now… get on top of me” When Mistpaw gets on top of her, she flips landing in a pinning position on Mistpaw. “Now you do it!” She meowed with amusement.
After a few hours she finally finished it. “I did that one too! Now teach me the good one!” Mistpaw began to chant again.
“Hold on let me go get another warrior, I can’t use this on you because it will hurt you…” Oceanmist went running off and found Riverstone and walked up to the black tabby deputy. “Your such a strong cat right? I need to show my apprentice a move, and I don’t want to hurt her, is it okay if I use it on you? It might hurt…” She mewed shyly and quietly.
“Sure… since it helps an apprentice I’ll do it” He replied happily and quickly pinned her, she immediately flipped into the air, but as they flipped sideways she kick into his stomach, flipping her to the ground below and sending him into the air as he fell, a shocked kitty!
Mistpaw stared in disbelief “WOAH!!! AMAZING!!! I WANT TO TRY IT!!! PLEASE!!!!” She pleaded, hopping every which way.
“Not right now, you can practice it though… the ceremony is in 15 minutes, I need to go speak to the Shadow Clan cats…” She mewed to her apprentice and silently left for the guest den. “Hello? Crowpaw? Ravenfeather?” Oceanmist mewed as she walked in.
“Yes what is it?” Ravenfeather called kindly.
“Umm… I was wondering, how is it in Shadow Clan right now?” Oceanmist said.
There was a long silence then finally, “Shadow Clan is doing fine… though… we are having trouble with prey, but… nothing we can’t handle as of now…” Ravenfeather replied quietly.
“Oh, well… alright, I have to go to the Ceremony, bye…” Oceanmist turned around and walked over to the center of camp. Muddystar was already there, with Fluffpelt and the kit by her side, she had already begun speaking.
“…and! May we praise Star Clan for the plentiful prey we managed to catch just before leaf-bare!” Cats meowing in approval. “Now, let us begin, the cat you see here is Fluffpelt, Mate of Lionclaw…” Lionclaw stood up higher, prouder then ever at his mate being mentioned. “She has decided she will except this kit here, as one of her own, thus, allowing this kit to become a River Clan cat… but, he needs a name, and I’ve had a dream from Star Clan of his name, from now on… this cat shall go by the name of…” Muddystar paused for suspense, and also to regain her breath. “Moonkit!”
Cheering starts in the crowd as the small kit happily looks down at them, absorbing the imprints of each and every face he saw, memorizing the cats of his new clan. Oceanmist stared at the kit, Moonkit huh? Well I believe he will become a great warrior, Moonkit just you wait, I will
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mentor you better then any other cat could ever, until then, I’ll help your mother care for you… Oceanmist thought happily as she close her eyes, took a deep breath of the brisk, slightly chilly air around her, and walked away happily towards the warrior den to sleep.
When she awoke the next morning the two Shadow Clan cats had left, She quickly stretched, yawning, and took a deep breath of the fresh morning air and happily padded out of the den to see Mistpaw standing there with 2 pieces of prey in her mouth, one of which she dropped for Oceanmist. “Lets go to the queen’s den! I want to meet Moonkit! I already ate, this is for Fluffpelt” She said as she turned and headed for the queen’s den. When they arrived inside they saw Moonkit with Fluffpelt.
“Ah Good morning Oceanmist! And who is that little cat beside you?” Fluffpelt mewed nicely, Moonkit walked over to Mistpaw and sniffed her a few times and stared at her fascinated.
“This is my apprentice, Mistpaw, she wanted to meet Moonkit, and give you some food” Oceanmist replied, looking at the small little kit.
“H-h-hello Fluffpelt, I-I-I’m Mistpaw! Here!” She quickly said shyly, dropping the prey beside Fluffpelt.
“Why thank you Mistpaw! You’re a very kind cat!” Fluffpelt said as she happily began eating the prey, a small rabbit. “Did you catch this?” Fluffpelt inquired suddenly.
“Y-y-yes Fluffpelt… I did!” Mistpaw mewed, half proud and half scared.
“Oceanmist… you’ve raised a fine apprentice here, I’m going to put in a word to Muddystar to make Mistpaw a warrior sometime soon!” Fluffpelt said happily.
Mistpaw’s eyes lit up with happiness. “Really! Really! Really! YAY!!!” Mistpaw began dancing around happily.
“H-h-hi!” Moonkit suddenly stuttered, and everyone turned to stare at him. “Hi… Fluffpelt, Oceanmist and Mithpaw!” Moonkit mewed happily.
“Well I’ll be! He CAN talk! But… my name is Mistpaw, NOT Mithpaw…” Mewed Mistpaw happily.
“So, Moonkit, do you remember why you were out there?” Oceanmist asked suddenly. So he can talk… what else does he already know at such a young age…
“No I don’t remember anything Oceanmist… I’m sorry” Moonkit said quietly, eyes down, unhappy.
“Well! I guess we will be going, I have to teach Mistpaw a move I showed her yesterday!” Oceanmist meowed quickly as she ran out of the den with Mistpaw close behind. “Bye you guys!”
“Bye!” Moonkit mewed loudly jumping around like an idiot. When he finally calmed down his brother, Wolfkit walked over to him.
“Stop acting like an idiot Moonkit… your so stupid sometimes…” Wolfkit muttered silently before padding back over to Fluffpelt.
“Stupid Wolfkit I’m NOT an idiot!” Moonkit growled in a high-pitched kitten voice, his white and grey tail flicking about angrily against the cold morning breeze, what a nice day… I wish I could go out… but I’m only a kit so it would be bad for me… especially since my mom already said I was rather weak right now, I better go in before the morning dew freezes my paws! and with that he dashed back into the den towards his foster.
“Um… Fluffpelt, is it okay if I sleep here?” Moonkit yawned, stretching.
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“Of course you can, I need to go to sleep early too anyways so alright!” Fluffpelt meowed comfortingly, curling up.
“Thank you Fluffpelt!” Moonkit mewed gratefully as he snuggled into her soft, fluffy ginger fur. “Goodnight Fluffpelt!” Moonkit mewed quietly.
“Please, just call me mom alright?” Fluffpelt meowed before falling into a deep sleep.
“Alright mom!” Moonkit mewed happily as he slowly fell asleep. He realized he couldn’t sleep and walked outside slowly, as to not wake his siblings or the other queens and kits, and sat down in the center of camp for a few minutes and then bowed his head for a moment, before getting back up, taking a deep breath and turning tail to go back to the den, when he noticed something, a small vole crawling just a few feet away, Moonkit quickly fell into a crouching position on instinct and pounced at it, grabbing it with ease and bit it’s neck quickly killing it, then he thought for a moment I caught something! I caught something! he happily began to pad over to the fresh-kill pile and then decided against it and walked over to the warrior den and padded in quietly, in a few moments he spotted the grey she-cat, she was still awake and appeared to not be able to sleep either, he slowly walked up behind her, she turned around shocked.
“What!? Oh… it is you, what is that?” She meowed gesturing towards the vole in his mouth. Moonkit quietly walked over and placed the vole beside her and then mewed quietly but triumphantly. “I caught it! I saw it walking through camp, and I caught it! And I decided I was going to give it to you as thanks! Thank you Oceanmist!”
Oceanmist stared at the kit in shock and surprise for a few more moments. He is just a kit and already he has caught prey? This kit is really something, I really cannot wait to see what you bring to this forest! she thought happily, and then took the prey. “I think I am the one who should be doing the thanking, but, you shouldn’t be here, go back to the queens den before you get into trouble Moonkit!” Oceanmist quickly and silently replied.

Yes, yes, that is correct, and that is the PROLOGUE of a fan fic,

as you can see I am the type who can dish out 100+ pages books quite easily if I ever get the motivation to finish em, but who the hell has that kind of motivation? seriously? maybe I'll get more motivation for it when I'm older....

hol...y...hell. that was long. but at the same time, its good. i lked it. my turn though. ok here it goes!!!!!!!!!

....

idk wat to write about, can i have some sugestions?

Thanks dude, I need to revise it and improve it, but thanks for liking it, I bet in about 10 seconds Illusion will start finding slight errors, he's good at that,

and any he missed I'll find in about an hour when I come and actually revise it,

how about something that interestes you, maybe a dragonball Z thing? (your pic lol)

oh yeah, sorry about the page numbers inbetween, I had it autosetting page numbers, and the header restated the name of the current chapter each page

ill go with a dbz thing.
its probable gonna have some spelling errors. srry.

the two stared at each other with something bubbleing in the air. something that you could almost taste, almost like that sweet sour taste of sweat after a long days of work and you are just too tires to wipe your forehead. but at the same time, something firy hot was right next to it, mixing and churning, like fire on oil.
it was hate. not the hate that you felt for somone that has just made you angry, but pure hatred. the air was thick with it. and it was somehow strangly.... pleasing to them. the two standing across the barren desert from each other. it twisted thier minds and made thier vision a bloody red. this was it, the last of all last battels. every broken enemy will know what it means when the out come is decided. they will know when these masters of war stoped, and the ground no longer shaked, and the fire the arose to the heavens was quenched to the last smolders, but until then, until all of this has rolled over, the indestructable will fight.

PROLOUGE: TASTE OF HATRED

what you think so far?

A very dark vicious use of diction, and a good setting for a fight, good description, I like it

though you're right, it is full of grammatical errors, that's why the Spell check is awesome though! :P

this computor im on no have spell check. i know, it sucks, but what you gonna do? want to hear more of it?

Sure,

Yeah that does suck, Spell check is so helpful lol

i know.
now, where was i?

PROLOUGE: TASTE OF HATRED

"WEll, this is it isn't it?" asked Laxan.
"surpirsing isn't it? after all this time, we're the only one's left," he laughed to himself, more of a childish giggle than a real laugh. "Its going to be a shame when you die, its going to get rather boring around here without you," answered Luther.
"My thoughts exactly, only without the smug little laugh."
"Hey, after all i've been thorugh, i deserve a laugh."
"Well, i have to give you that. the dogs of war they called us. huh, time flies so fast," for a moment, he looked at himself through others eyes, all of the lives that he had taken, what was his fate? to the stair way to heaven after this, or the elevator to hell? either way would be fine with him really. as long as he won, Laxan would be fine.
"yes, yes it dose."
they said nothing for a time, they just stared at each other with thier tainted sight. anihilation, this is wahat they both knew would happen to one or the other. the crushing darkness that would never end, the eternal sleep. oh well, they knew it would come for them some day, this end of blood and gore. a smile twiched on luthers face, for the shortest of seconds that could ever be calculated by any form of meaurement.
Laxan saw this. he gritted his teeth, and lunged with devil speed. luther did not see this till it was far too late. laxan jumped behind him and grabbed him by the shoulders. he flung him upin the air behind him. when he reached ground, or close enough to it at least, laxan twisted around and kicked luther in the back. with a sound like lighning on diamonds, luther went flying through the dunes the the east. recovering fast, luther got up from this little kick, as he thought of it, and turned back to meet laxan. knkocking sand off of his shoulders, he said to himself, "son of a bitch must pay."
he looked up then and saw laxan basically flying towards him, but he was ready this time. as laxan came withen milemeters of his chest, he simple side stepped. when laxan's torso passed him, he grabbed his anckel, squezzed with a crack that made laxan gasp, and flung him in to the ground. luther kicked the ground under his feet and the vibrations flung laxan up. when he was tecnically on his feet again, luther kicked him in the chin and sent him flying in the oposite direction. this was it, the final battel is here, armeggeddon has begun.

PART ONE: BLACK BLOODED SKY

when you read these try to imagine them like a dbz show or something. how is it?

PART ONE: BLACK BLOODED SKY

laxan got up slowly, his anckel hurt like hell. but he had come too far to give up and die here, too far. this whole thing started with nothing more, for him, than a simple dare. now, he had been drug to the desert to meet his doom? where and how was that fair? well, no. he wasn't going to just lay down and die, he promised.
"What's that matter? don't tell me that you are giving up after just that, i knew you were soft but not that soft." luther was taughting laxan like a two year old who just figured out that the neighbor kid wanted his toy. "come on, get up!"
laxan glared at him, trying to spit venom from his eyes as well as his soul. he got up on to his feet witha grunt and twisted his anckel to the left. snapping it back into its original place. it hurt, yes, but he was too damn proud to think of it.
"If you're still thinking about fighting, i should let you know. i've become indestructable. there really isn't any chance-"
he was cut short by laxan lunging at him again. this time he was succsesful. he flew at luther and hit him in a cloths line. another sick crack echoed around the empty desert. luthers head touched his back but did not fall off, darn. he sisn't fall either. his arms went limp and his head stared into nothingness. then, his head blinked. his arms twiched and moved to replace his detached head. they picked it up and placed it back on top of his neck. with, this one being wuite gut churning, another echoing crack of cartilage and bone, his head was on top of his neck again, completely unfazed.
"What? is that all you-"
again he was cut off short. laxan jumped in the air with break neck speed and smashed laxan's head down into his body to that he looked like, instead of a head, just a lump and some skin. this blow also sent him diveing into the sand. down he went, and plenty of sand with it. laxan jumped up again and landed some thirty feet away. he watched, and waited. he knew that this fight wasn't going to be over like that, it would have been just too easy. nothing that easy was ever gained without some kind of a trick, it had to be one; he just witnessed the man put back on his head! minutes passed, and nothing. the sand had long since setteled. what was he doing down there? what could he be doing-
a hand erupted from the sand and grabed his good anckel. he cruched that one with as much effort as a child. laxan screamed and fell over. luther erupted from the snd next and brought laxan with him. he flew into the air and threw laxan across the sandy ocean. but it didn't stop there, no, laxan had broke his neck twice now, it hurt more than other bones did. so instead of letting him fall to the ground, he flitted over to him and kicked him intto the stoach, sending him upward. he flitted to his back side and balled bothe of his fists together. he smashed his back and sent him back to the ground. this continued a few more times. flit, smash to the gut, fall to the left. flit, kick in the face, send him to the right. flit, grab the neck and fling him to the ground. this time, he left him alone and let him fall. he hit the ground hard and skitted to a halt. luther dropped down to the ground then.
"take a last look around while you're alive, im an indestructable master of war!" he shouted at nothing much impeticular. luther raised his hand, palm open, straight up into the air. electricity flowed through his arms and out of his palm, rising heaven bound to the sky. when it reached the sky, clouds started to form. dark, evil clouds of thunder and hate. the cloud grew and laxan tried to get up. lookeing up, laxan saw the deadly scene that had ghosted its way into the sky. returning his glare back at luther, he got up slowly, bleeding from a few places now, and prepared for the fight of his life, or the next, or any other he would have. as he thought this, black rain feel from the dark abyess of the cloud, the oily rain of hate, it will later be known as.

PART TWO: MASTERS OF WAR

I like how the story flows, but it seems like a sequel, or a first story that gives you information very little at a time,

me too

well then, im gonna have to give you a backround story right?

ok, ill give you guys some background story for them.

ok, vetruss, if you do that, then do it on another thread plz. not becasue its my opinion that it'll suck or something (i tend not to judge) its just that i started one on here, and i need to finish it. so can you put it on one of your threads and we can talk on that one?